Sorry, I'm getting back very, very late on this one
Reason is that I unfortunately had to move the studio desk in a new room and nothing fits in terms of audio, so in a nut-shell : I have lost my ears !! ( or at least my trusty/habit/used to... whatever, I was familiar with ).
Listening on brand new headphones as well and have moved from closed to open back headphones, so everything is very different and that will take some time to get on with new listening habits and good referencing again I believe.
So, I suppose this is the amended version after some time, its sounds good to me, nice work with the vocals IMO. Maybe a less harsh/short and "in your face" kick and more washed toms with reverb ? And then maybe the arp synth part ( i.e : at 1:25 ) with more delay/echo/reverb. But again, I won't go too much into details since I'm not yet feeling 100% sure with what I'm listening. So it's OK for a broad impression, but not for going sharp into details.
Anyway, nice one to listen to and happy to see that you're keeping it up with music production