Hey there @Woask
What jumps out during 1st listening is the Kick & Ride really too loud. That ride works for me at 1:40 for example, but if you listen at 2:10 it's then push too far. It's a rather long percussive sound, if you raise the volume and don't use a lush reverb and shorten the length of the percussion, it doesn't really work IMO. Why simply not using another percussive sound instead of modulating this one ?
The atmosphere sounds in the background are also masked behind the kick rumble, try to re-balance your Mix, put your faders down, start with the kick lower than it is now and then bring on the other elements one by one.
Arrangement & sounds wise I like the minimal approach and the way you managed to build tension using those Fx sounds & percussive elements, also not sure about the female opera vocals in that track like @kuchenchef mentioned, it's a nice vocal but perhaps not for this song, something like the Carl Orff "Carmina Burana" staccato choir voices will work better if you'd like to put something with this opera-drama feel in the track. But that might lead to crazy results as well, pure personal & creativity insight here