Hey there Sean,
Though there is a serious improvement comparing to the first one, you're still having a big issue with dynamic range, this is again due to levels & gain staging. This is SoundCloud Sean, it's not Tomorrowland Festival live scene and while your all mix is low in volume, your kick is a festival killer one !
You know what, this Techno Kick sounds really nice, the tonal, punch and rumble are there and that's great, but even if we can now hear the other elements much more than in the previous version, this kick & it's rumble are sucking all the energy from your track.
If you start your mix with this Kick so loud, it's not possible to correctly gain stage the other elements and retain a full mix acceptable loudness & minimum Dynamic Range. You still need some, even in Techno.
Expose report :
In this case you probably needed to sacrifice other elements levels to maintain an acceptable final Mix level, or you had to put a peak/limiter on your master, I don't know, but the result is that this track is absolutely not loud and you need to crank up the volume knob in first place, but because of the Kick & rumble peaking near 0 dB it doesn't work.
Remember that your channel levels addition themselves when reaching your master channel.
Start mixing with low levels, remember the audio workflow : Midi/Audio Source Volume -> Effects -> Channel Fader -> Master Fader and that your Channel Fader are "Post" faders and that you need to adjust your volume at the audio/midi source either from the plugin/instrument output knob or using a utility or in Ableton Live you can also put an empty Audio Effect and make a Macro knob to the "Chain" volume. Try the included download ( Using Live 10.1 here )
-inf to 0 Fader.adg (2.5 KB)
Also in another topic we talked about Voxengo Span, try out those custom presets I made, one is for K -14 Monitoring & the other one is for full dBFS. I have tweaks some advanced settings in Span so that the response time & visual is much more detailed than when using the default presets, you will have more harmonic content information and a faster display to follow your tempo. Just unzip this on your desktop, start Live, load an instance of Span and use the Presets/Load feature from the plugin to load each preset from your desktop. Once you have loaded a preset you can use Span Presets Menu Options to save them. Have a try to see if that suits more your needs.
TEKA-Span Custom Presets.zip (8.5 KB)
You can use this ( or Live "Utility" Audio Effect ) as the 1st plugin on every track & use it to gain stage all tracks in your mix, with the goal to keep at least -6dB of Head Room when reaching your Master Channel. Once done & having a good Mix balance you can then use compression & limiting to increase the final Mix volume.
Another important point regarding Mix Levels & Balance is to work with a Reference Track to set a target, I already mentioned that in other topics, this really helps.
Next to the volume & DR issue, I also wrote this in my previous comment
Though this is going a bit better, you should drop some classical percussive elements like hats and make some variation to that 4x4 kick, stop it at some time, change pattern, use snare rolls to create tension. Check that set from Charlotte de Witte and listen to the intro https://youtu.be/-_G7pZhLOkA
So get inspired, work your magic but please review your levels & gain stage & mixing approach when it comes to online music, I know it is very tricky comparing to listening to your music quite loud in a room or outside, but that's it, you can't use the same levels & references for online music. Just remeber it's more easy to start mixing at low level and increase the volume & loudness using Limiting & compression afterwards than starting loud and being left with no room.
Hope that helps, cheers !