2nd track

this is what i come with for my 2nd track!! electronic trancey style… i think!



i think its an improvement from the 1st one, definately!



all feedback very welcome and appreciated!





if i could make any requests,

i would really like ppls opinions on the transitions in and out of the breakdown and the break itself.



this was an area i really needed and wanted to improve





but otherwise any feedback would help massively!!!







cheers guys!!







http://soundcloud.com/georgekadar/2nd-track

there maybe a few E.Q and sound issues.



the speakers i have are probably the worst speakers you can make music with





monitors are on the agenda!!!

is it bad like guys???


Hey mate



There are no real eq problems so don’t worry to much about that. Done a great job considering no monitors!



Into the break works great! No problems there.



But the drop back into the track. It doesn’t work to well. It seems to me that at 4:16 the track should kick back in with the melody that you used during the breakdown. But instead, it slowly builds back into a different melody. I don’t think it worked well.



Also It seems like a mix, you’ve got 4 (i think) different melodies in the track. I think if you just used one or two and build some variations the track would work better.



Hope this helps!

[quote]onetwoseven (12/08/2010)[hr]Hey mate

There are no real eq problems so don’t worry to much about that. Done a great job considering no monitors!

Into the break works great! No problems there.

But the drop back into the track. It doesn’t work to well. It seems to me that at 4:16 the track should kick back in with the melody that you used during the breakdown. But instead, it slowly builds back into a different melody. I don’t think it worked well.

Also It seems like a mix, you’ve got 4 (i think) different melodies in the track. I think if you just used one or two and build some variations the track would work better.

Hope this helps!
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thanks, i really appreciated your constuctive criticism

there was a few ideas i had and that was the one 1 chose. seems to be used in the genre of music im trying to follow. its proven difficult to do

when i get back in mine im gonna try bringing it straight in with the melody

thanks again for your reply, ive taken it on board