Looking to get some advice from experienced producers on my 2nd song 
Any and all feedback and advice is very wanted and appreciated ^^
p.s it has no end yet
http://soundcloud.com/hazzarous/thirst
you really must give it a more natural feel because from what I can tell you are looking for a fluent , not robotic sound :
- play with note velocity
- take the fixed grid off and make notes shorter , longer , misplace them a bit
In regard of composition,your piece is too repetitive.
your white noises need to be worked out and the underlying bass is not really good.
That’s all the areas I think you should work on. Good luck!
by bass, do you mean the notes, or the instrument?
both