Am I getting closer to commercial level or not?

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I’m wondering if I’m getting closer to commercial / pro level or not ? Any feedbacl appreciated.



The original is:



And that's my try:


I don't have big experience with vocals and overall I had a problems with actually completing my tunes earlier so im satisfied that i managed to, at least, end this but is it good, bad, poor ? I tried to finish it before the deadline (it was a remix competition) so I heard it waaaay too often during last weeks and it's so damn hard to judge my own work.

Ahh The Genre - I was focused on creating something suitable for current modern pop music, dance, with some positive chords, some piano sections inspired by Avicii productions (but not as sidechained, compressed etc.)
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to me this doesnt sound any different than the pop dance i hear on the radio, so if thats what youre aiming for i think youre not too far off…

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[quote]ekko (14/09/2011)[hr]to me this doesnt sound any different than the pop dance i hear on the radio, so if thats what youre aiming for i think youre not too far off…[/quote]

Yea, I was aiming for that crappy modern pop played on the radio :slight_smile:



Thanks for the feedback.