This is the 3rd song Ive made, 8 months in and about 297 songs left and 5-10 years before something really good comes out :P
Any criticisms, listens, technical feedback are truly appreciated.
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Nice melody pal, the only thing I would say is that the breakdown comes in a little harsh at 2.35. I would probably just filter it in or something a little bit more gently. Also maybe half the first chorus, just so its about 30 seconds long. And then in the second drop add another element just keep it sounding fresh.
Other than small changes that I would make (remember all views are personal opinions and everyone has different ears lol) I would say its a solid track.
Keep it up 
Hey there,
I have to disagree with xpa on the breakdown hitting too hard (unless it was fixed since I checked the track) it sounds just right, the only thing I have to say about the middle breakdown is that it probably is 8-16 bars too long, kind of a long time to wait for a drop on the dance floor. If this is your 3rd song that’s pretty amazing, you have some talent here. It actually doesn’t sound as cheesy as i thought it would, sounds just right for the style I think. Anyways I’m sending you a follow on soundcloud.
Cheers
Thanks a lot man, that really made my day! =D Back to work now.
Has a sort of Avicii’ish sound.
Not my personal thing to be honest.
I liked the second breakdown a lot, nice intro to it, but I agree with K & S it could be made shorter.
Disagree with xpa I actually the drop could do with more, it just feels the build up carries too much energy with it, maybe raise the low cut on whatever has lows in the build up so that the bass hits much harder when it kicks in.
Finally you use the same build up twice, I would change one of them slightly. Maybe for the second build up instead of dropping straight in you can stop everything for one bar and then use a sort of crash 1/4 bar just before it drops in. Kinda like the deadmau5 Right This Second drop, though he cuts everything for a lot longer which would not be good for this track.
That’s some quality! Have to agree, the second break is a bit to long, but overall I like the arrangement it’s very very effective I think. When it’s kick in after the main break the main synth is a bit too loud in my opinion and the kick and bass etc too soft.
Hi mate, my main thoughts are that the structure and arrangement of the song is good, and the sounds used are good etc - so you don’t need to do anymore there, it’s just as it should be.
But i think the main thing to work on then is the mixing, and perhaps some layering of sounds to get a bigger. more powerful and uplifting overall sound.
Have you done much layering in this track? I am thinking particularly things like the lead(s) and the pads?
Thanks for all your input guys! The 2nd breakdown is longer than the first, and it does make it sound off a bit (Hoping no one would catch that LOL) But yes, its definitely still needs work. Mixing is hard! The main lead is 2 synths. Its not layered to the point of having 1 lead only in 1 octave, and the 2nd lead in a higher octave, more of theyre both playing the same notes, just each timbre occupies different frequency ranges. It took me a really long time to finally figure out mixing!