So here is my first track, still a work in progress any comments would be appreciated
Clear Skys 1st demo by SlenderFall
Cheers
Slender
Pretty solid track fella, I think all that needs work is the breakdowns, particularly the second one, I think it could do with being abit longer to add more tension.
Thanks for the feedback and that was my thoughts exactly
Gimme a shout when you do a tweaked version.
[quote]dannycueballtaylor (08/05/2010)[hr]Gimme a shout when you do a tweaked version.[/quote]
I literally could as u live pretty close to me 
i’ll try and give constructive criticism with out causing offense as i believe that no one gains by everyone telling you your tracks are great.
firstly i don’t know if you’ve gone mad with eq or filter but the track sounds extremely thin like all the life has been filtered out of it and there’s not much low end (don’t know if that was the aim) the stereo width of the track is also small and could be fixed with some listening and panning. the structure is a little one dimension
now for the good i like the sounds you’ve used and how they work, all of the main elements for a good track are already there.
well done and this track sounds a lot better than my first attempt 
[quote]slender (08/05/2010)[hr][quote]dannycueballtaylor (08/05/2010)[hr]Gimme a shout when you do a tweaked version.[/quote]
I literally could as u live pretty close to me :P[/quote]
Ha Ha, always a good thing mate, we should hook up, always good for inspiration, we could make a track or something, best way to learn!
Where exactly you living? Croydon way?
Thanks Jon, thats why I put it up here to get it critised about my errors
I also agree about the thiness and thanks again
[quote]dannycueballtaylor (08/05/2010)[hr][quote]slender (08/05/2010)[hr][quote]dannycueballtaylor (08/05/2010)[hr]Gimme a shout when you do a tweaked version.[/quote]
I literally could as u live pretty close to me :P[/quote]
Ha Ha, always a good thing mate, we should hook up, always good for inspiration, we could make a track or something, best way to learn!
Where exactly you living? Croydon way?[/quote]
Well Ilive in Redhill/Reigate which is just the other side of M25 or a couple of train stops away from East Croydon - yeah a hook up would be cool
[quote]slender (08/05/2010)[hr][quote]dannycueballtaylor (08/05/2010)[hr][quote]slender (08/05/2010)[hr][quote]dannycueballtaylor (08/05/2010)[hr]Gimme a shout when you do a tweaked version.[/quote]
I literally could as u live pretty close to me :P[/quote]
Ha Ha, always a good thing mate, we should hook up, always good for inspiration, we could make a track or something, best way to learn!
Where exactly you living? Croydon way?[/quote]
Well Ilive in Redhill/Reigate which is just the other side of M25 or a couple of train stops away from East Croydon - yeah a hook up would be cool :)[/quote]
Cool, not far at all, a couple of stops from me. PM me on soundcloud, we’ll sort something out if you like!
Will do danny on sunday