Could you please take some time to listen to my track and let me know what you think. Please be honest!! I won’t be offended!
Used Ableton and Sylenth1.
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Cheers
Hey Rich
I’ve left some comments on your SC stem. It seemed to be glitching out every now and then and I don’t know if that was your machine when you rendered it out or my connection.
Good first track though. I’ve made some comments on the arrangement. Hope they help.
That break is the biggest issue I think. Try some one shots in it or fall back on the trusty white noise to fill it up a bit. 
Cheers bud, I wasn’t sure myself if the break was too long. really appreciate your comments and feedback. thanks again!