Maybe some more variations with for example the kick, you could also remove the kick in het break or give it a different pattern. Maybe a extra melody to keep it interesting. Good luck with it!!
Maybe you can put as well some cool FX on the vocal and automate some parameters during the time to have some progress going on. As wel some stab-sounds who are playing well together wih that vocal sample. the arrangment of the breaks doesnt make so much sens to me if nothing else changes after the break. There are as well to many of them. Anyway, thats just my opinion. good luck with it.
I would recomend you warmly to go for the web paas silver and watch some of the tutorials of completly producing a track from begining until the end. And just build in the begining your track the same way like they did. I did it the same way. I had a laptop with internetaccess near my workingpc and build my first tracks like this. watched a litle, hit stop and build and continued watching. It will worth every single pound! You will learn so much!!! And you allways have something like a guide beside you to not loose the orientation. so you have to watch carfully and when in the Trainingvideo for example is changing something like a new element, (perco, synth etc) you do it somehow in the same way by yourself. so when you got a good fundament you can change the thinks how you like, I allways got a lot of new ideas and inspiration and changed that.At least I liked it So good luck with it:)