HAI GUYS
Anyways just finished my 2nd track after 4 months of producing and thought Id enter the contest for fun and for practice, and its a free remix pack! I don’t want any votes, I’d rather have your honest feedback! My goal into this contest was to get a vote that WASN’T from myself, and i ended up getting 7. 7 big smiles for this guy
[url]http://play.beatport.com/contests/pepsi-calvin-harris-lets-go/4fb6ced4753a0d1a2b0009e2[/url]
You know I am somewhat in awe of how fast you seem to be learning! The last track you posted up was fantastic as well…
In regards to this track I think the way you use vocals needs a bit of work, they dont flow all too well IMO, it just sounds a bit like you produced the track already and thought you may as well add the vocals and call it a remix?
Examples of where it flows weak is the very first vocal snippet to introduce the vocals. You could try something like add a vox ambient sweep into it using the vocals and 100% wet reverb and then reverse the product into those vocals first vocals.
You could also do a bit of work on the processing of the vocals, maybe its just me but I can hear artifacts, possible from transposing it?
Love the melody and the beat, you definately took the feedback given from your first track and applied it well!
The intro, structure (apart from the vocals) and the outro were all good. The lead in’s to the breakdowns could be better IMO but thats cause I disliked the way you used the vocals to introduce the breakdowns more so than anything.
Would prefer it if it were an instrumental, thats partly because I wont blow steam up your arse and act like I liked the way you used the vocals, and secondly cause I think Ne-Yo’s a twat.
Keep it up!!! Already surpassed my skill and I’ve been producing for a year and 5 months now
I wouldnt mind hearing about how you are learning as well Probably not something you are willing to share but I need to figure out a way to start learning faster other than just self experimentation.
[quote]MistroPain (04/06/2012)[hr]You know I am somewhat in awe of how fast you seem to be learning! The last track you posted up was fantastic as well…
In regards to this track I think the way you use vocals needs a bit of work, they dont flow all too well IMO, it just sounds a bit like you produced the track already and thought you may as well add the vocals and call it a remix?
Examples of where it flows weak is the very first vocal snippet to introduce the vocals. You could try something like add a vox ambient sweep into it using the vocals and 100% wet reverb and then reverse the product into those vocals first vocals.
You could also do a bit of work on the processing of the vocals, maybe its just me but I can hear artifacts, possible from transposing it?
Love the melody and the beat, you definately took the feedback given from your first track and applied it well!
The intro, structure (apart from the vocals) and the outro were all good. The lead in’s to the breakdowns could be better IMO but thats cause I disliked the way you used the vocals to introduce the breakdowns more so than anything.
Would prefer it if it were an instrumental, thats partly because I wont blow steam up your arse and act like I liked the way you used the vocals, and secondly cause I think Ne-Yo’s a twat.
Keep it up!!! Already surpassed my skill and I’ve been producing for a year and 5 months now
I wouldnt mind hearing about how you are learning as well Probably not something you are willing to share but I need to figure out a way to start learning faster other than just self experimentation.[/quote]
Great idea with the reverse reverb leading into the vocal. Ive always heard it in other songs, it just never ocurred to me on how to make it. Like avicii - levels, wyhen that huuuuge reverb kicks in with the vocals. It sounds like an excellent tip, thanks for the idea!
I dislike NEYO too besides his RnB stuff, I do like the melody/beat over the vocal. Its all good, it was good practice
As far as learning, I learned a TON from sonic acadamy. Even though 5 months is not a long time, Ive pretty much spent 4-8 hours a day everyday working at this. So its been a lot of learning and effort. I always read almost every single interview of my fav producers, and see how they work. I also read a book called emotional intelligence 2.0, which really helps you manage your emotions. Music is very emotionally driven. Before i insert some fx here, or make a buildup, i think of why im doing it and how its gonna sound to my listener. BT and paul oakenfield said before they write a track, they draw it out on canvas of how they want it to sound and what they want it to do.
It just slowly comes to you, the more you read, watch, learn, experiment, listen, and enjoy.
Thanks for your feedback, you guys have helped me out a lot! Ill return the favor by trying to give my honest feedbacks on your tracks
I agree with Mistro, very professionally sounding track seeing as you’ve only been doing it for 5 months you ****t
The vocal does sound like it needs a bit of processing to make it sit better in the mix but overall this is really good!
Thanks en1gma! Making music is a an enjoyable process but hearing other’s feedback is awesome as well!
Yeah, this is a KILLER track. The drop is really, really nice. I reached for the volume knob and almost started fist pumping.
The suggestions I have are level are:
- The vocals need some work. My impression is that they need to be louder but pushed into a compressor to control peaks some and that some delay would work well. The vocal is also really wide and I think it should be more centered. BUT - I’m also working on a remix at the moment and I’m having some trouble with the exact same thing, so take my advice with a grain of salt.
- Snares leading into drop could be fatter and crunchier.
- There’s a weird thing going on with the white noise just before the drop where the volume ducks a little. Sounds like this might be some weirdness going on with a limiter or something. Def. needs to be fixed.
- The bassline after the drop could have more bite and grit in the higher frequencies. Great example:
Hardwell - Spaceman (Official Teaser) - YouTube
That probably is too much for this track, but moving in that direction would be nice.
- There’s very little melody in the breaks besides the vocals, and I think the track needs it. Doesn’t have to be too in your face. Maybe some lush pads in the background to keep the energy rising. You could even use the same sound as you have going on during the latter half of the driving sections.
Overall, I think you could focus on cleaning up the mix and making each sound a little “tougher” to give it impact.
Again, this is a really great track that could use some polishing.
Do you have a soundcloud? Would love to hear your other stuff. Love to do a collab with you as well - let me know if you’re interested in working on a track together.
[quote]thegeek (12/06/2012)[hr]Yeah, this is a KILLER track. The drop is really, really nice. I reached for the volume knob and almost started fist pumping.
The suggestions I have are level are:
- The vocals need some work. My impression is that they need to be louder but pushed into a compressor to control peaks some and that some delay would work well. The vocal is also really wide and I think it should be more centered. BUT - I’m also working on a remix at the moment and I’m having some trouble with the exact same thing, so take my advice with a grain of salt.
- Snares leading into drop could be fatter and crunchier.
- There’s a weird thing going on with the white noise just before the drop where the volume ducks a little. Sounds like this might be some weirdness going on with a limiter or something. Def. needs to be fixed.
- The bassline after the drop could have more bite and grit in the higher frequencies. Great example:
Hardwell - Spaceman (Official Teaser) - YouTube
That probably is too much for this track, but moving in that direction would be nice.
- There’s very little melody in the breaks besides the vocals, and I think the track needs it. Doesn’t have to be too in your face. Maybe some lush pads in the background to keep the energy rising. You could even use the same sound as you have going on during the latter half of the driving sections.
Overall, I think you could focus on cleaning up the mix and making each sound a little “tougher” to give it impact.
Again, this is a really great track that could use some polishing.
Do you have a soundcloud? Would love to hear your other stuff. Love to do a collab with you as well - let me know if you’re interested in working on a track together.[/quote]
Thanks for the feedback! It’s great to get feedback from other producers because I miss the minor details sometimes. I will definitely work on the tips you’ve mentioned. To be honest, the vocals are raw, I didn’t really tune in em and they show as a lot of the feedback I got were to tweak the vocals.
Lol, we’re already friends on Soundcloud
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Man I’d love to do a collab in the future but honestly not right now, I’m in the process of leaving a deployment and moving when I get back so I’ll have my hands full, and I’m still inexperienced (less than 5 months ish), but definitely open about it in the future when I get better and have more time.
Haha, so we are!
Replied to your message on SC.
great remix
I agree that a bit of delay followed by compression on the vocals would help them to sit in the mix better, they sound a bit dry at the moment- the main synth after the drop could maybe be grittier, possible a bit of disortion or bit crushing just to take away the ‘cleanness’ of the sound, just my opinion tho. Crash cymbal maybe slightly loud for my taste but other than that pretty much spot on.
Good work